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Posted by RS on February 13, 2002 at 15:32:53:

In Reply to: My Abstract: Farmer's hardship posted by Taoran Sun on February 12, 2002 at 22:17:52:

Posted by RS on February 13, 2002 at 15:16:17:
In Reply to: My Abstract: Farmer's hardship posted by Robert Schwart on February 12, 2002 at 22:14:35:

: Abstract for history paper 1

: Theme: peasants’ hardship before the revolution

: Argument: Peasants generally suffer substantial hardship in life in the 18th Century in
: France.

OKAY AS A STARTING POINT. IN THE END YOU WANT TO ARRIVE AT SOMETHING MORE SPECIFIC THAT GOES DEEPER AND BEYOND THINGS THAT ARE RATHER OBVIOUS. WHAT KINDS OF HARDSHIP ARE REVEALED IN THE DOCUMENTS? IS THIS HARDSHIP AS SERIOUS AS DESCRIBED BY CAVANAUGH FOR THE 17TH CENTURY? WHAT DOES SMITH SAY ABOUT HARDSHIP? THESE ARE QUESTIONS TO HELP YOU THINK FURTHER.

: Supporting Evidence:
: 1. The extreme time of fatigue for the farmer during the working half of the year.

IS THERE EVIDENCE FOR THIS STATEMENT IN THE DOCUMENTS? I DON'T RECALL SEEING ANY.

: 2. Farmers psychological self-disdain after long times of suffer: They view themselves as slaves. INTERESTING, BUT YOUR CLAIM THAT THEY VIEW THEMSELVES AS SLAVES IS PROBLEMATIC BECAUSE NEITHER DOCUMENT WAS WRITTEN BY A FARMER.

: 3. From a different angle, farmers hobby of saying bad things about the priest, landlord, and everyone else who isn’t there and their contempt towards women show that these people, after too much suffer and being in one of the lowest status in the society, need to have an outlet for their inside fury (WHAT PROOF OF THIS?) towards their boss and even their peers, especially transferring the kind of suffer of hardship from upper-class towards the only people below them: women

THIS IS AN INTERESTING SPECULATION THAT SUGGESTS A DIFFERENT THEME, I.E., FARMERS' PROJECTION OF FRUSTRATION ONTO WOMEN AND COMPLAINTS ABOUT TWO KINDS OF SUPERIORS, THE LANDLORD AND THE PRIEST. THIS COULD BE A GOOD THEME AND THE BEGINNINGS OF AN ORIGINAL INTERPRETATION OF THE DOCUMENTS IF THERE IS SUFFICIENT EVIDENCE TO SUPPORT IT. BE CAREFUL NOT TO MAKE CLAIMS THAT ARE NOT SUPPORTED.
: Connection: Bonnie Smith’s description of farmers’ most important entertainment carnival shows that the carnival has become a way of living apart from the reality to escape their normal hard life: Only people really suffering a lot want to escape the reality. THIS CONNECTION MOVES AWAY FROM YOUR ANNOUNCED THEME OF HARDSHIP INTO ESCAPE. YOU HAVE TO KEEP CONSISTENT.

: Conclusion: The farmers living in the 18th Century in France suffers substantial hardship because of the domination of the upper class. They have extremely hard and boring life year in and year out. These kind of long suffer cause their self-disdain, but eventually lead them to use different way to find an outlet of their suppressed emotion, transfer their fury and escape the reality, which eventually led to a climax as the French Revolution began.

THIS IS A CLAIM THAT IS NOT NECESSARILY INCORRECT IN SOME WAYS, BUT IT IS NOT ONE THAT YOU CAN SUPPORT BY THE DOCUMENTS AT HAND. RETURN TO THE DOCUMENTS AND LET YOUR GENERAL IDEA EMERGE FROM STUDYING THE DOCUMENT.

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: Posted by RS on February 13, 2002 at 15:16:17: : In Reply to: My Abstract: Farmer's hardship posted by Robert Schwart on February 12, 2002 at 22:14:35: : : Abstract for history paper 1 : : Theme: peasants’ hardship before the revolution : : Argument: Peasants generally suffer substantial hardship in life in the 18th Century in : : France. : OKAY AS A STARTING POINT. IN THE END YOU WANT TO ARRIVE AT SOMETHING MORE SPECIFIC THAT GOES DEEPER AND BEYOND THINGS THAT ARE RATHER OBVIOUS. WHAT KINDS OF HARDSHIP ARE REVEALED IN THE DOCUMENTS? IS THIS HARDSHIP AS SERIOUS AS DESCRIBED BY CAVANAUGH FOR THE 17TH CENTURY? WHAT DOES SMITH SAY ABOUT HARDSHIP? THESE ARE QUESTIONS TO HELP YOU THINK FURTHER. : : Supporting Evidence: : : 1. The extreme time of fatigue for the farmer during the working half of the year. : IS THERE EVIDENCE FOR THIS STATEMENT IN THE DOCUMENTS? I DON'T RECALL SEEING ANY. : : 2. Farmers psychological self-disdain after long times of suffer: They view themselves as slaves. INTERESTING, BUT YOUR CLAIM THAT THEY VIEW THEMSELVES AS SLAVES IS PROBLEMATIC BECAUSE NEITHER DOCUMENT WAS WRITTEN BY A FARMER. : : : 3. From a different angle, farmers hobby of saying bad things about the priest, landlord, and everyone else who isn’t there and their contempt towards women show that these people, after too much suffer and being in one of the lowest status in the society, need to have an outlet for their inside fury (WHAT PROOF OF THIS?) towards their boss and even their peers, especially transferring the kind of suffer of hardship from upper-class towards the only people below them: women : THIS IS AN INTERESTING SPECULATION THAT SUGGESTS A DIFFERENT THEME, I.E., FARMERS' PROJECTION OF FRUSTRATION ONTO WOMEN AND COMPLAINTS ABOUT TWO KINDS OF SUPERIORS, THE LANDLORD AND THE PRIEST. THIS COULD BE A GOOD THEME AND THE BEGINNINGS OF AN ORIGINAL INTERPRETATION OF THE DOCUMENTS IF THERE IS SUFFICIENT EVIDENCE TO SUPPORT IT. BE CAREFUL NOT TO MAKE CLAIMS THAT ARE NOT SUPPORTED. : : Connection: Bonnie Smith’s description of farmers’ most important entertainment carnival shows that the carnival has become a way of living apart from the reality to escape their normal hard life: Only people really suffering a lot want to escape the reality. THIS CONNECTION MOVES AWAY FROM YOUR ANNOUNCED THEME OF HARDSHIP INTO ESCAPE. YOU HAVE TO KEEP CONSISTENT. : : Conclusion: The farmers living in the 18th Century in France suffers substantial hardship because of the domination of the upper class. They have extremely hard and boring life year in and year out. These kind of long suffer cause their self-disdain, but eventually lead them to use different way to find an outlet of their suppressed emotion, transfer their fury and escape the reality, which eventually led to a climax as the French Revolution began. : THIS IS A CLAIM THAT IS NOT NECESSARILY INCORRECT IN SOME WAYS, BUT IT IS NOT ONE THAT YOU CAN SUPPORT BY THE DOCUMENTS AT HAND. RETURN TO THE DOCUMENTS AND LET YOUR GENERAL IDEA EMERGE FROM STUDYING THE DOCUMENT.

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